Writing Challenge Using Connectives!

Today I woke up and it finally looks like a nice day outside so I decided to go and take a walk outside in the forest. As I walk into the forest I see a small house it looks like there is know one in it so I walk closer. It is wooden and kind of looks like a cottage but I am getting hungry so i walk back home. The next day I decided to go back to the small house but there is someone in it I ask if they own the house the even though they said  yes but I don’t believe they seem kind of odd like they were not telling the truth. So then I go home and do some research about the house. At this point I feel like giving up but then I saw something it said that the house is abandon. So why is that lady saying that owned the house she could of said no then everything would be fine. So I go to confront her but she was gone so I guess we will never know why the lady said she owned the house when she did not.

Commenting Guidelines

Rating the comments from the most least helpful to helpful!

  1. Number 1 is not helpful because it uses a lot of slang words  and not all people would understand what she is trying to say.
  2.  Number 2 is not the best because it is a bit random but it has no spelling errors and is easy to understand.
  3. Number 3 is also helpful because it is easy to understand and has no spelling errors.
  4. Number 4 is not very good because it has a lot of spelling errors and id hard to understand and does not say who it is to.
  5.  Number 5 is really good because it has no spelling errors and no slang.
  6. Number 6 is not helpful because it is rude and has slang.
  7. Number 7 is not helpful because it does not say who it is from and who it is to.
  8. Number 8 is not the best because it can be rude but it has no slang and no spelling  errors.

-C h i n a-          by Florence Maidment


2. China is on the continent Asia.

3. The capital city of china is  Beijing.

4. China is a part of northern and eastern Hemisphere.

5. 1.398 billion is the population of China in 2019.

6. There national language is Mandarin and they speak several hundred languages.

7. Renminibi is the currency they have in china and it means the peoples currency in Mandarin.

8. One connection china and Australia have is in 2014 Chinas president and Australias prime minister describe their relationship as a comprehensive strategic partnership.

9. China has the largest population in the world!.

10.  Three countries that share a boarder with China are Mongolia witch is north west to china, India is south west to China and North korea is north west to China.